Daddy Zaraki! Even if he seems to be the type that dumps all paperwork to Ikkaku, Ken-chan is an effective captain. Two current vice captains are from his division, after all *grins*.

“What’s you’re name?” She asked politely.
^Should be "your name".

The Rukia comparison bit, to be honest, kinda bug me because it's difficult to fit into canon. I mean when right before Renji passes out in his fight with Byakuya, he recalled about Yumi and Ikkaku talking to him about how it's easier to let something apart than to hold on (or something like that).